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Litotes
warning

"Heat-related illnesses are on the increase due to increasing global temperatures. The normal physiological response to excessive heat is known as heat stress and although uncomfortable is generally not considered pathological. If this is not alleviated, then a true heat illness may result, which may be mild, e.g. heat cramps, moderate, e.g. heat exhaustion, or rarely severe and life-threatening as heat stroke."

Line 1:236 · Consider using 'ignored' instead of 'not considered'
EG List And
warning

"Heat-related illnesses are on the increase due to increasing global temperatures. The normal physiological response to excessive heat is known as heat stress and although uncomfortable is generally not considered pathological. If this is not alleviated, then a true heat illness may result, which may be mild, e.g. heat cramps, moderate, e.g. heat exhaustion, or rarely severe and life-threatening as heat stroke."

Line 1:376 · An e.g. list gives selected examples, so it should not end with 'and' or 'or': 'e.g. heat exhaustion, or rarely severe and'.
Commas
suggestion

"Heat-related illnesses are on the increase due to increasing global temperatures. The normal physiological response to excessive heat is known as heat stress and although uncomfortable is generally not considered pathological. If this is not alleviated, then a true heat illness may result, which may be mild, e.g. heat cramps, moderate, e.g. heat exhaustion, or rarely severe and life-threatening as heat stroke."

Line 1:290 · More than 5 commas in a single sentence might make it more difficult to read.
Oxford Comma
suggestion

"It is important to recognise that as serious as heat stroke is, more of the healthcare burden from increased temperatures is from the heat aggravating pre-existing morbidity, including cardiovascular, respiratory and renal disease. It is clear that during and following spells of hotter weather, all-cause morbidity and mortality rapidly rises 3."

Line 2:189 · Use the Oxford comma in 'cardiovascular, respiratory and renal'.